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Eternity For A Torment by ~tagge:icontagge:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Abstract


Loneliness is a torment.
Solitude, once my friend now an enemy.
Am I searching for something that doesn’t exist?
I’m alive but it feels like I’m dying.

Slowly my sanity is being eaten away.
Each day brings more hurt.
I see her and I know… never.

My own inexperience only hurts matters more.
Paradoxes like this make me question everything.
I said my piece and received my due pain.
Something wants me to do this all over again.

Since when does emotion hurt this much?
Something so real to me, and so fictitious to her.
As with everything in my life, I was too late.
My heart is the eternal optimist,
Continually it refuses to listen to what my mind is saying.

If I really care about her more than anything,
I’ll care enough to let her be happy.
Her smile is more important.
I’ll live with my own hurt, as long as she never has to.

She grabs my hand and I wish she’d never let go.
I see her in my dreams and I wish I could sleep forever…
Reality once again calls me home.
Even it won’t allow me a moments joy.
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Author's Comments

Well what can I say? I'm not a very public person, it's a long story behind this bit of writing. I wrote this up a couple of months back in a rather rough period of my life. The last line probably isn't relavent anymore, but I wrote this in my journal or musings book. So, I never expected anyone to be reading it... and I won't change my writings, I don't want to lose the feeling. It's at best 'rough' poetry or mabye a bit of abstract musings. Whatever. I don't like labeling.

I never actually thought I'd be posting anything here, that wasn't actually my orginal intent. But it seems a lot of people use this place as an open forum to express themselves. Anyway, I won't ramble on. Let me know what you think folks, good or bad.

Peace.
-T

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~abrekiz Jun 19, 2003, 3:15:17 PM
This is really good dude I can totaly understand this and almost feel your emotion at the time.............its going into my fav.....
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~darknessfalls Jun 19, 2003, 4:58:08 PM
wow thats great o.o i can relate to it a lot
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~falconfemme Jun 19, 2003, 5:38:41 PM
Beautifully written and I too can relate to it wow I'm speechless, Great Job!Floating
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~sweetprey Jun 19, 2003, 6:56:11 PM
Good job!! I like it a lot. Like everyone else I can understand that. *currently feeling that* Linux/Unix He's my lover...Hehe.
--sweetprey

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To the well organized mind, death is simply the next big adventure.
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~mourning-dove Jun 19, 2003, 8:12:05 PM
Wow. I'm totally amazed. You are an extremely talented person. But I think I've bothered you enough with my other comment so... have a nice day and a good weekend. :-) (Smile)

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"If suicide weren't a sin I'd shoot myself in the eye just to avoid listening to some people." ~ME~

"You don't have to understand a woman. You just have to love her."
~my favorite quote from some old guy on a tv show~

:hug: :hug: :hug: :-) I love you.
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~grungeguitarist Jun 19, 2003, 10:24:25 PM
yes you have written a piece that has definatley connected to many people and i must congradulate you on such a fine piece of poetry. Keep writing!

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"Dude I didn't know it was Haloween until I saw the stoplight walk past me!"
-Pat

"I MAKE LOVE LIKE A FUCKING STREET FIGHER VIDEOGAME I GOT SPECIAL MOOOOOVES AND SHIT!!!"
-Shane Koyzcans
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~madnifesto Jun 20, 2003, 12:23:12 AM
This is a great piece of work...! Nicely done! Painful to read, almost everyone can relate to this...:) (Smile)

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My inner turbulence has finally found a way to mess up my life.. Not Just My Head!!
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~crimsonlarko Jun 20, 2003, 2:20:44 AM
Wonderfully emotional and personal. This deserves every bit of attention it gets. :) (Smile) Great work!
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~whywhy Jun 20, 2003, 5:44:02 AM
Is this ur first submission?

Cause if it is... what a fantastic way to start off! Great work man. You should pleased with the results.

WHYWHY.

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Watch the man walk on over the hill ---->
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~mrfeelnothing Jun 20, 2003, 7:45:31 AM
Beautiful, painful, truthful.
I especially like this line:
Am I searching for something that doesn’t exist?
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